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An increasing treand is nowadays for young adult to play compuuter games. Some people say this is a negative development. Discuss and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt,
the
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 people copy others and buy the latest devices and use more and more model computers or laptops in the contemporary world. Some certain individuals believe that computer
games
 give a detrimental effect
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 the person and society. In my opinion, I think,
this
 behaviour offers dangerous results to each individual and the nation On the
first
 hand, one serious effect
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addicted
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 to
computer
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game
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games
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 is social withdrawal which means they tend to have a distance or a gap between family, people and
the
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society, which leads to unrespect or ignoring activities in the culture or postponed
his
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activities daily living.
For instance
, while playing hours and hours above mentioned single or group
games
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 engaging family valuable
time
, for going out with friends, for social interaction as a responsible adult. It automatically delays and impossible to fulfil his job responsibilities and family or social needs.
Moreover
, when he is entertaining for
this
 a long
time
, he tries to lock the door in his room to minimize disturbance for his activities from the family. He
also
 does not eat
properly
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 balanced diet which is important.
Thus
, he unknowingly gets health issues because of decreased physical
exercises
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such
 as obesity, fluctuation
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 blood pressure, diabetes and cardiac diseases physically and anxiety or depression mentally. Ultimately, the user for excessive
games
 on the devices, if he goes to school or university that always might be complained by teachers or institute’s lectures as he will not maintain punctuality and failed to submit assignments the given
time
 properly, as well as he would receive fever sores in the exams and he has to postpone his continue education with values. It
also
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with
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his siblings
this
his
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 action and
parents
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his parents
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 will have to spend more money on
particular
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 child unnecessary.
This
also
 develops as a family conflict due to the tiredness
from
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 the parents
for
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 earning more money to complete family needs and
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 the
end
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 parents get old and remains unhappy families. In conclusion, the person who uses more computer
games
 grows most of the
time
 negative aspects of his life and family members and the society.
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