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Many university students live with their families, while others live away  from home because their universities are in different places. What are the  advantages and disadvantages both situations.

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To be honest, history has never been my topic of interest. Having said that, there was one historical
event
 that left an impression on me. It was Reunification Day, which took place on April 30th 1975.I learned abt
this
event
 extensively when I was in school, ,
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 It has been a while, so my recollection of what my teacher taught me may not be very accurate, so bear with me. Vietnam underwent many years under the colonization of foreign invaders and
this
 is the
last
 war before a new era of peace and independence is opened for us.
This
event
 is considered a significant milestone in Vietnamese history because
,
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 Our
country
 was divided into the Northern part and the Southern part. Communication at that time was almost impossible and people across the
country
were
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 living in poverty.
However
,
this
event
 marked the end of the Vietnam war, two
parts
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 were formally reunified after many years of separation. From now on, 30 4th is as a national holiday to commemorate the reunification between the two regions as well as to pay a tribute to brave soldiers who sacrificed during the war. In conclusion,
this
event
 is an unforgettable historical highlight in our
country
, I always feel so proud and grateful whenever thinking about
this
event
,
I
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 hope everyone will always remember
this
 important milestone
of
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 the nation.n conclusion,
this
event
 is an unforgettable historical highlight in our
country
, I always feel so proud and grateful whenever thinking about
this
event
,
I
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 hope everyone will always remember
this
 important milestone
of
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