You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you would like the job • give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Madam or Sir, My name is Cole, I have read the advertisement you put in Daily Paper magazine and I exactly want to apply for

this

job

First

and foremost, I like the

job

. I am studying a child care course in Tafe Sydney now, I really like to play with kids and look after them. I recommend myself to you as you know I will do my best to take care of your six-year-old daughter.

Secondly

, I am suitable for the

job

. I reckon that I can do the

job

not only because I have a patient character but

also

because have the professional knowledge to conduct the commission,

thus

I can make your darling happy and healthy.

Thirdly

, I will show you how I spend my spare time in Australia. I would like to let you know what I will do most during the period of living in Australia. Most of the time I spend is for studying or learning from my tutors,

besides

that, travelling around the Australian metropolitan city will consume most of my free time. Thanks for your reading, I look forward to your letter. Best regards, Cole Chen May 2022

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

197 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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