Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

One of the biggest decisions
when a
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, when a person is ready to be independent,
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person
is ready to be independent is to remain in their hometown or home country, or
on the other hand
to set up in a new place, maybe a new city inside their county or abroad . That depends on what the
person
is seeking in their personal improvement or life opportunities, and in my personal case I rather the latter. In Latin America,
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job
opportunities are minimal and hard to find. especially for artists (like me).
This
is likely the main reason for Colombian artists to look for better chances to find a good
job
in the arts.
For example
, an actor that starts his/her career in Colombia will struggle with TV media because it is an exclusive and close environment, and if the same
person
wants to be independent and try by himself it is because they have some savings to do it.
On the contrary
, the US industry produces movies,
theater
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and
performance
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performances
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as a daily routine and the possibilities to accomplish an art
job
are higher. Another important factor is that if the home country's economy is struggling, a half time
job
will not be enough to have a decent daily
lucrativity
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lucrative
creativity
and it may be hard to persist in any dream. In other countries (the
first
world) work opportunities are several, gratefully to their strong currency that started being produced and accumulated in massive numbers decades ago. Wealthy nations
also
provide and improve many educational resources, basically to support their civil intelligence and get better results in common
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tasks so they can
fulfill
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their expectations. To conclude, moving anywhere has never been an easy decision;
however
a brave and adventurous
person
that works hard to find what they really want, will be disposed to face the setbacks as many times they have to, and for me, I am ready to decide the best options for my future and to move somewhere to find and do my dream
job
, and be well paid for
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what I like.
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