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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the houses or building they live in.

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Buildings and houses provide shelter to
people
 as well as memories attached to them. But, in certain societies around the globe, individuals usually become eager about exploring the history of their habitat before they move in to clear myths and misconceptions about the lifestyle and activities of
people
 who lived there. Because some may think that those who resided there might have been involved in certain criminal activities like committing murder or practices that have resulted in fear of being taunted by evil spirits.
Therefore
, the only way to find out and clear
this
 confusion or illusion is through a historic analysis of the structure.
For instance
, if
people
 who lived in a certain mansion killed someone during their stay, it is often believed that the soul of that person might keep on wondering and tormenting anyone who resides there.
Hence
, some will be eager to research the place.
Then
, the more
people
 become curious and suspicious about certain events, the more they dig for knowledge.
On the other hand
, nowadays, individuals are interested in collecting information using various methods
such
 as gathering data from state agents, which are always up to date with
such
 matters before selling or renting it.
Also
, another door will be to inquire from relatives and
neighbors
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 who know more about the place.
For example
, community members like grandmothers and Fathers are a good source of
such
 information since they have been around for a long, so they provide valuable data. From these sources history of a dwelling can be obtained. To conclude, indeed researching the past of homes before occupying them is common in some nations. meanwhile, they do
this
 for clarity and to clear
misunderstanding
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 about the past of a house.
As a
result
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 they
consults
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 state agents and elders about
such
 information. 288 words.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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