Task 1 You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference Why you want your colleague to give presentation What arrangement will you do for this conference

Dear Tony, I am writing to you to let you know that the international
hotel
conference in 2022 would run in
next
Saturday in our
hotel
, we would like to invite you to take part in
this
meeting to demonstrate a presentation to show people how to work in your sales apartment in
last
year. As you know, many
of
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hotel
industry peers will come to join the international
hotel
annual meeting, as well as to review
last
year's
hotel
occupancy data. In my opinion, you are the best seller in our
hotel
. Especially your speech and your confidence, what is more,
this
is a great opportunity to share your talent. By the way, we prepared an afterparty where we can enjoy some refreshing drinks and delicious food. I promise you will have a good time. Looking for you reply at 48 hours
,
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if there any problem please let me know. Yours sincerely Ella
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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