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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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These days, more and more people do their job at
home
 with the development of technology. In my opinion, I would argue that working at
home
 has more negative impacts than
positive
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.  The benefits of working from
home
 are reduced commute
time
 and relative freedom of
work
 hours. On the one hand, you can save a lot of
time
 spent on the road every day and gain more
time
 and energy. Homeworkers,
on the other hand
, can organize their
work
 around their
home
 life because they can stop or start
work
 at will, and they can
also
 take on any other tasks they need to do during the day and
then
 get the
work
 done. Overall, employees have more control over their lives.
However
, despite these positive factors, there are
also
 many disadvantages. The
first
 is that when working from
home
, you may be interrupted by various things,
such
 as childcare, etc., the
work
 rhythm is disrupted, and you can’t be productive at
work
. Another disadvantage is that it violates the social attributes of people. I think the purpose of
work
 is not only to complete tasks and make money
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 but
also
 to
work
 hard with colleagues. Colleagues are not only
work
 partners, but
also
 friends who get along day and night.
Due to the
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 lack of interaction,
this
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can lead to feelings of loneliness and disconnection from colleagues over
time
. All in all, I think while working from
home
 has both positives and negatives, there are more negatives.
Therefore
, employees should carefully consider the pros and cons to determine whether working from
home
 is the best option.
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