Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What is your opinion?

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proportion

of ownership of three types of

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devices in homes. The below line chart depicts the average of

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on in each household per week. All data is gathered just for an unknown country in a century from 1920 to 2019. Overall, the percentage of people who could buy

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, respectively.

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time and now 100 per cent of

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ownership which had slight fluctuations

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, we see a steep decline in the number of

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

one of the consequences of the medical care is that people are living longer and expentensy is increasing Do you think this advantage of development overwieghts the disadvantage?

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction.What measures could be taken to prevent this.

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. what do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?