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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What is your opinion?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
The above line graph represents some data about the
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proportion
 of ownership of three types of
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electrical
 devices in homes. The below line chart depicts the average of
hours
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 on in each household per week. All data is gathered just for an unknown country in a century from 1920 to 2019. Overall, the percentage of people who could buy
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a refrigerator
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refrigerator
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 had a significant jump among other appliances. Notably, the average of using all devices had
an
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 downward trend in
this
 period of time.
To begin
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, 30
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 and
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four tenths
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 used
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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 and washing
machine
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, respectively.
However
this
 rate changed sharply
among
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 time and now 100 per cent of
household
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households
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 have access to vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,
fewer
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and fewer
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that
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 80 % are washing
machine's
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 ownership which had slight fluctuations
duurig
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during
this
 century. According to the
second
 line
gragh
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graph
, we see a steep decline in the number of
hours
 each home use these
electronical
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electronic
 tools per week from 50
hours
 in the
first
 year of
this
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 of its amount in 2019. I should mention that
this
 fall was so sharp
untill
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until
 1960 and
then
 it was modestly till 3
hours
 ago.
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