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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The developed
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 usually enhance other
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 by contributing resources to the poor
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 which could not actually come over the poverty issue.
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, the richer states should support in other ways. Personally, it is definitely agreed with changing
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the idea of giving.
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, begin with the shortcomings of the original method, The people who are reciever will be familiar
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 receiving every supports from the richer
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, they tend to
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 more than learn to solve problems by themselves. By analogy, when
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 with kindness, they only wait
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for feeding
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 of hunting by itself.
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,
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 advocating method is not much effective in long-term development.
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, another drawback is leaders
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 undeveloped
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. It is concerned that what is the main reason for being poor. Statistically, the states which could not pass the bar of success typically have a high rate of corruption by their leader.
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, It is like throwing all
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precious the resources into the waste rather than supporting directly suffering people.
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, a distinct example is the development of
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 people union’s contribution. Since
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, it is clear that
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 only is not a good way of supporting suffered
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. There are many obvious shortcomings and realistic
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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