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The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
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Given are two maps illustrating the development of a coastal town named Pentland from 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Pentland urbanized significantly during
this
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 57-year period, with the disappearance of grassland alongside the main
road
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 and the construction of many amenities for residents. Commencing with the layout in 1950, in the middle of the map was the main
road
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, leading from the north to the south, with two sideways located on the northern
side
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 of the
road
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, near the sea, one
side
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 connected to the industrial
area
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 and the other linked to a car
park
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. There was nothing else alongside the main
road
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 except the grassland. By 2007, it had
considerablely
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considerably
considerable
 altered, a notable change had been the introduction of residential areas on the southeast
side
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 of the main
road
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, with a cinema on the opposite and several shops located on the out layer of the houses and the cinema. The old car
park
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area
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 had been transformed into apartments. A new
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 car
park
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 was established in front of the shops on the same
side
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 as the cinema, to the north of which was a newly-built swimming pool. With the establishment of a
park
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 on the northwest
side
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, came the demolition of the industrial
area
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, which
siginificantly
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significantly
 improved the air quality of
this
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area
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, side, area, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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