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You have received a letter from your bank asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However the card was missing from the envelope. Explain. Why are you writing? Express concern about the missing card Ask them what they intend to do

#bank #receipt #card #envelope #concern
Dear Sir, I am here to inform you that yesterday I received a courier from your bank but the
card
 was missing from that envelope. So I cannot acknowledge receipt for the same in reply to your mail. I am requesting you to address
this
 situation on
priority
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a priority
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 basis because from the date,
card
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the card
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 has been allotted to me is registered against my name and
also
 account has been activated. In that
case
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,case
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 the yearly charge will be implemented from the date of account activation at my end
either
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whether
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 I use it or not. Kindly look into
this
 matter and if possible cancel
this
card
 and allot me a new
card
 as soon as possible. Thanking you Regards Vaibhav
deshwal
Correct your spelling
decimal
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