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Some people think that strick punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #strick #punishments #offences #traffic #accidents #measures #road #safety
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010. It is
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 hospital has a huge difference. There are added roundabout and
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 station, and the
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 is divided into two parts. Overall,
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city
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 hospital expanded in 2010. South of the
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connected
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. In 2007,
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both sides of hospital
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, and on the east, where is
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a car
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. It was small and could not accommodate more patients
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, in 2010,
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 by roundabouts, and the
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next
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 hospital. The patients can go to
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 directly.
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