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Some people think that strick punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #strick #punishments #offences #traffic #accidents #measures #road #safety
The two maps illustrate the difference
of
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 the
road
 passages of a
city
 hospital between 2007 and 2010. It is
easily
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 to find that the hospital
road
 in front of
city
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the city
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 hospital has a huge difference. There are added roundabout and
bus
 station, and the
car
park
 is divided into two parts. Overall,
city
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the city
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 hospital expanded in 2010. South of the
city
 hospital is hospital
road
, which
connected
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city
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the city
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road
. In 2007,
bus
 stops
located
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were located
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 on
the
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both sides of hospital
road
, and on the east, where is
car
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a car
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park
 for staff and
public
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the public
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. It was small and could not accommodate more patients
into
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 the hospital.
However
, in 2010,
bus
 stops are converted
to
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 one large
bus
 station which is
linking
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 to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 by roundabouts, and the
car
park
next
 to the
road
 can only be used by staff.
On the contrary
, the public
car
park
 moved to the east of the
city
 hospital. The patients can go to
public
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the public
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car
park
 via ring
road
 directly.
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