These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

The world and society
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been completely changed by highly developed technology. Computers and mobile phones make it convenient for everyone to finish the work just by staying at
home
. From
this
perspective, someone may think it is perfect to do their jobs at
home
.
However
, I think
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life style
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does more harm than good for the following two reasons. For one thing,
home
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is a place which is so comfortable that there are a lot of distractions for the
home
-working ones to keep in a good state to handle important tasks. An environment for rest or relaxation is not suitable for more serious working issues. Soft beds will attract a person to lie on
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while televisions and video game
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may easily free him or her off for one hour.
For example
, we students are forced to
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online during the most difficult period during the unstoppable spread of the COVID-19. Many students confess that they
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frequently pay attention
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things like games or social
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media
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medias
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rather than working hard or listening to the teachers. For another,
home
-working makes everyone separated and has fewer chances to communicate on giant
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and less efficiency to understand each other. If a group of colleagues are working together to develop a program, they cannot keep working and discussing at the same time and starting one after ending the other once and once again is the only way. In
this
case, errors will
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for a while because feedback
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more time and
problem
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report will
also
encounter a delay. From these above, the disadvantages
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more than the advantages if people finish their jobs at
home
for too many factors disturbing the process and more time-cost with worse achievements.
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