These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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The world and society

has

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been completely changed by highly developed technology. Computers and mobile phones make it convenient for everyone to finish the work just by staying at

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. From

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perspective, someone may think it is perfect to do their jobs at

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, I think

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life style

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does more harm than good for the following two reasons. For one thing,

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home

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is a place which is so comfortable that there are a lot of distractions for the

home

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-working ones to keep in a good state to handle important tasks. An environment for rest or relaxation is not suitable for more serious working issues. Soft beds will attract a person to lie on

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while televisions and video game

machine

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may easily free him or her off for one hour.

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, we students are forced to

learning

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online during the most difficult period during the unstoppable spread of the COVID-19. Many students confess that they

are

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frequently pay attention

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things like games or social

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media

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medias

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rather than working hard or listening to the teachers. For another,

home

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-working makes everyone separated and has fewer chances to communicate on giant

topic

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and less efficiency to understand each other. If a group of colleagues are working together to develop a program, they cannot keep working and discussing at the same time and starting one after ending the other once and once again is the only way. In

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case, errors will

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for a while because feedback

need

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more time and

problem

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report will

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encounter a delay. From these above, the disadvantages

weighs

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more than the advantages if people finish their jobs at

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for too many factors disturbing the process and more time-cost with worse achievements.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

291 words

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