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Most companies and organizations required their employees to wear uniform to work. What are the jobs that needs the uniform to make it a good thing? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniforms.

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The graph compares and
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contracts
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 the difference between the amount of
pizza
,
fish
 and
chips
 and
hamburgers
 bought by the teens in Australia between 1975 and 2000. Over the 25 years,
fish
 and
chips
 being the
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mostly
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 consumed fast food
,
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 has experienced a plunge and fall to the least bought one. At the same time, the consumption of
hamburgers
 and
pizza
 both increased and respectively rise to the
first
 and
second
. In 1975, teens eat 100
times
fish
 and
chips
peryear
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per year
 but less than 20
times
hamburgers
 or
pizza
. After that, the youngs prefer
fish
 and
chips
 less and less, though rebound slightly from 1980 to 1985. Until 2000 the average
times
 of
fish
 and
chips
peryear
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per year
 has
drop
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 under 40. Meanwhile, the consumption of
pizza
 and
hamburgers
 keep on raising until 1995, despite the rate of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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is
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slowing down while that of
pizza
is
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increasing.
However
, for the
next
 five years, the amount of
pizza
 eaten per year remains at about 85. The data of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 remains its increasement and raise over 100
times
 annually at 2000.
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