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In some countries, men and women are having children at later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development ? Do advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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The two maps illustrate the changes
about
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in
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road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010. It is clear that the
road
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 access to the
city
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 hospital had been greatly developed and
became
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become
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 more efficient because of the new
park
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, roundabout and
bus
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 station. In 2007, the
city
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 hospital was in the
center
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centre
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 surrounded by a ring
road
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. There was a north-south Hospital Rd with six
bus
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station
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stations
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 on the north of the hospital. On the north of the hospital, there was a west-east
City
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Road
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 that intersected Hospital Rd.In the northeast corner of the intersection, there is a car
park
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 for staff and
public
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the public
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. The
road
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 access to the hospital had
alter
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 considerably since
then
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. In 2010, some new construction was built around the hospital. The intersections of the ring
road
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, hospital
road
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 and
city
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road
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 became roundabouts.The six single
bus
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 stations
were
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disappeared and a new bigger
bus
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 station was built
in
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on
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 the west of the hospital
road
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 by connecting the two roundabouts.
Moreover
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, a new public car
park
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 was established in the east of
hospital
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the hospital
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. The old car
park
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 was only for staff.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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