In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Unemployment is a major issue ,especially in developing countries.
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, we can't deny the same problem in the developed world
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. And on top of that,as per the study, the number is increasing day by day. The highly qualified graduates are searching for jobs not even within a country but
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across the globe.There are numerous factors,which influence the employment rate in a state. The aggravating factor would be a political one. We will discuss the point in detail for
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explanation. As we know,in every national establishment, politics is the prime source of its development. In each and every developed country, one point is common they have a strong and reliable government at the centre,which guides the democracy on the path of progress. If we compare the same with developing nations like India,Srilanka,Pakistan or other Asian countries,the government in the centre is not so strong to take the decision in people's interest. In continuation with the political structure, there is a very big issue of corruption and relationship management within the dinner.
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, If someone reaches a good position at a
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he or she will try to accumulate his or her relatives at the
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and even try to take benefits from that. The best example of
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the Gandhi family. For the
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70yrs,
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same family is ruling the congress
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.
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eventually leads to corruption in the
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and the same will reflect at the national level in their decisions. If we want to grow as a nation
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we need to remove
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barrier from
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political field and not only from politics but from each and every sector of employment in the country. There should be a criterion for the selection of candidates in Politics,Engineering,Medical or Management,so that the deserving students can come forward and take the nation on a path of development.
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