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Many elderly people are no long looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is true that nowadays an increasing number of oldsters are not under the care of their close people but live in retirement homes or in the special medical centres created for them. There is a number of positive and negative sides to
this
 change in the modern world. On the one hand, today the community notices several beneficial consequences of
this
 shift. The
first
 advantage of
this
 is that the health of all people in these institutions is always monitored.
In other words
,an individual lives there and has permanent access to professionally educated doctors and nurses, who could help him any time of the day.
For instance
, if a person has heart disease and feels bad he could be delivered to the operation room which is
couple
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 of minutes from his accommodation very fastly. The
second
 beneficial side for society is that workers who have retired parents are working more efficiently and are able to afford to relax after a tough day.
For example
, it is necessary to have time for recovery for those whose work requires a great deal of physical labour.
On the other hand
, the parents and the part of the public whose parents are in these kinds of places can face some kinds of mental problems. There is no doubt that people who used to live in a family are moving out to these institutions feel lonely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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