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These days , more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time , either to find a job or to study . There are clearly many benefits to doing this , but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties

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It is evident that “These days , more and more people are going to other
countries
 for significant periods of time , either to find a job or to study . There are clearly many benefits to doing
this
 , but people who live abroad can
also
 face some difficulties . “
i
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 agree with
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the sayings
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sayings
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saying
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. It seems advantageous that you can come into contact with many new
culture
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.
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Maybe
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May be
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 it can help you in your
excercise
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exercise
 or in communication . And you can show
for
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your
friend
about
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your profound knowledge so you can be proud of yourself .
Besides
 going to other
countries
 will help you to know more new language and you gonna so cool if you can speak
foreign
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 language before other people or maybe you can
has
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 a
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chance
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 to come big company .
On the other hand
, if you
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 to other
countries
 you gonna feel so lonely because your family and your
friend
 isn’t
next
 to you or you can’t meet them . and you can’t confide
to
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 your best
friend
 .
Besides
 you can meet
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 with money because maybe you don’t have enough money for subsistence there for you have to find
job
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a job
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 to make money from there you don’t have
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many
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any
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 time for your
friend
 and you gonna lonely . While it is undeniable that going to other
countries
have
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has
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 many benefits ,
attractions
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and attractions
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. But are you mentally ready for the dark side ?
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