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Some people think computers and internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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 individual believes that the internet and computer are a vital part of pupils'
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, in the opinion of others,
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 need teachers for effective
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. the following paragraphs have discussed both views and conclude with my opinion. On one hand, using a computer and the internet for
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 is the easiest way for learning the subject while sitting at home. To explain
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, Modern technology and globalization are allowed
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student to study in a foreign
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 and stay in their home countries. To illustrate
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, I followed my master's degree via distance learning from a UK
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 and completed it while I was working in Qatar. Notwithstanding, I may not follow a master's degree from a UK
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, if I did not get a chance to learn through above said learning method. On other hand, learning in the
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 is an easy and quick way for
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 to learn the subject matter. While the tutor explains the lesson, the student can catch the lecture in
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 easy way and request for re-lecture if they could not understand any specific area.
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, the Sri Lankan government conducted school via online
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 during the COVID pandemic. Srilankan's Sunday times conducted the survey and note that
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 who are studying in grades 6 - 9 got lesser marks than what they got while they studied in the
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 lectures. In conclusion, using computers and the internet for
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 is useful for
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 students,
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 who is studying in lower classes are required
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 lectures.
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, in my opinion, both are required for
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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