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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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Nowadays hunger is a significant issue for most nations,
although
 there is a belief that it is better if every nation provides the demanded
food
 from its citizens
country
 itself rather than importing variable bread from overseas.
Nevertheless
, I disagree with the notion and I believe, that if a government decides to reduce
food
 imports, there will be
less
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fewer
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 various sorts of
food
 for its people.
This
also
 could
inresult
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result
in result
a
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price boom in
food
 supplies. To commence, some nations are not able to produce their
food
 needs because of a specific location of the
country
 or not having enough technology for manufacturing some sort of
food
.
In other words
, a county's environmental position could affect
food
-producing significantly. For a better
understanding
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 UAE
have
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 a harsh environment in which some fruit and vegetable are not able to grow there so if the countries' authorities decide to lessen the
food
 imports they may face some challenges in providing their nation's
foodfood
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food food
good food
.
secondly
, a lack of technology could force a nation to import most of its foods. In
this
 ,
case
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the case
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 if underdeveloped land
tend
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 to produce their needed
food
 by
themselves
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itself
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they
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it
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 may end up with poisonous
food
 product as the result of enough and up-to-date
food producing
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food-producing
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 machines. To continue with, sometimes buying from abroad is the cheapest and most convenient way of getting
food
 sources for countries. If authorities legislate to lessen the foreign
food
 import can
fromresult
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from result
 an extreme rise in
food
 prices. Since the
contries'
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countries
food
 companies would not find any opponent in
food
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food-producing
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producing
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production
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 so they may increase their product price as they are the only
food
 supplier in the
country
.
Besides
, some sorts of foods tend to be cheaper in other lands. Take Banana
for
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 instance,
this
food
 source costs 2 dollars per Kg in the case of my
country
's own production
when
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and
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 simply importing it from Brazil just
cost
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costs
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 1 dollar per kg. Overall, there is a general idea of producing
food
 as much as possible
instead
 of buying it from overseas.
However
, I am still convinced that
this
 notion may be costly and not possible in some countries as they may not have conditions for producing
food
 in their lands.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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