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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, despite the scientifically proven requirement for lifelong learning, the dominant opinion in
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's minds is that having innate intelligence (thinking skills) is sufficient for a successful life.
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 problem and the solution for the above case. Received genes appear by influencing a person's propensity to learn, form and developmental abilities throughout life. Because of
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, many
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 are still convinced that having thought skills
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 a greater influence than gaining new knowledge.
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, scientists have proven long ago that despite the influence of innate intelligence, in the 21st century a person is more affected by factors
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 progress, because the world never stands still, and continues to grow and develop.
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, in order to become a successful person,
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 need more acquired knowledge, which cannot come from birth, but only in the process of learning and personal growth. The solution to
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 problem is to get the idea through information distribution that lifelong learning helps
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 adapt to new updates in the world, as it helps them keep up with modern "trends" and gives an incentive to develop and become successful.
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