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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads.to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
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In recent years,
government
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the government
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focuse
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focus
focuses
focused
 on improving
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quality
quaility
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the quaility
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 of life,
that
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which
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 would bring a
lot
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benifits
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benefits
 for citizens.
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 as. communication,
transprotation
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transportation
,
health
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and health
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 care. Some
arquement
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argument
arguments
 that built railways is more useful for local
people
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 than roads. In my opinion, it is
good
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a good
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 idea that more
train
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sation
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station
 is built. There are some reasons.
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 of all, it reduced
pollution
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 when more
people
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 give up driving to work
in
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on
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weekday
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weekdays
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.
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Nowadays
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Nowaday
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,
people
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 spend a lot of time on the
road
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in
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during
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 rush hours. At the same time, emissions of
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car
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cars
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 bring
a
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apply
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pollution
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in
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to
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 our
enviroment
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environment
.
People
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 easily get upset, if they got into
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam for
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a longtime
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longtime
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long time
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. Research has shown that it
is get
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 more
pollution
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 of air that
car
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stoped
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stopped
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 on the
road
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 without cutting power. Trainstation is a good way to make easy that
train
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 never could get into congestion and
train
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 is a public transport which is more helpful to reduce air
pollution
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.
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, it solved congestion on the
road
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 while many
people
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 commute by
train
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, nearly years,
a
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the
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 number of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 is growing. So, a question that a number of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 is over volumed of
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road
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the road
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 is following.
This
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 caused traffic
jam
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jams
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 have
being
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been
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horrible
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a horrible
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 problem.
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, the
train
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 will take more
people
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 to go to their destinations without waiting on
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road
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the road
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in
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during
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 rush hour. It is more
convience
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convenience
 for
citizen
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citizens
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.
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, taking public transport is cheaper than privatcal
vichele
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Michele
.
People
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 could save money to do others they
intrested
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interested
.
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in.
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 Overall,
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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pay
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pays
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 more money for building
railway
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the railway
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. It
bring
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brings
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 more it is a good decision that advantages than drawbacks.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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