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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for an number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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Residential schools are often seen as perfect for children.
However
, there are people who oppose it for a variety of reasons. As these arguments have their own significance, a critical assessment is needed before reaching a logical conclusion. On the one hand, there are people who think that a range of
options
 are there before a
school
 student other than being in a boarding
school
. The best among these is the provision of studying from home. To be precise, a day scholar can have ample time to spend with his family, friends and relatives. At the same time, he has his set schedule at
school
.
This
 ensures him a balance between his emotional and intellectual
developments
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.
Similarly
,
options
 like open schooling can be seen
competent
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 alternatives to boarding
school
. They highlight the affordability and effectiveness of
such
options
 and
hence
 they believe boarding schools
not
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as
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an excellent option for the children.
On the other hand
, the supporters of residential schools project a
well- structured
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 platform they offer. For example, a student at a residential
school
 has set schedules for both his academics and his recreational activities, and
this
 can mould him
to
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 a better citizen in
the
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society. The second favourable factor they focus on is
at
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the wide range of opportunities a student can avail at a boarding
school
. In
case
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 of academics, students get opportunities for individual tuition, group discussion and libraries for reference. Turning to recreational and entertainment
area
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,they can enjoy music,
movies
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 and can play games of their choice.
Therefore
, a significant proportion of people set it as an excellent option. After analysing both these views in detail, though there
exist
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 a wide range of
options
, it seems to me that. a residential
school
 can serve students in the best way,provided that it is supervised in a perfect way.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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