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The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The acceleration of industrialization and the prosperity of the economy benefit our society a great deal . But the lack of housing designed for the community to live in big cities is a serious problem and the consequences can be bad. Only the ministry can solve
such
 problems. I completely agree with
this
 situation. I will explain my opinion in my essay. There are several damages to housing the lack in cities.
That is
 it significantly worker's the community's quality of life.
In other words
,when there are few houses in the city , the nation moves to the villages ,which significantly reduces the quality of living standards. It
also
 leads to a shortage of workforce power in various large factories. Yes,of course ,
this
 is a serious shortcoming for society and the regime.
On the other hand
, politics will definitely solve
this
 problem because it is responsible. The state is trying to solve these problems but it has other problems as well. A variety of large factories and plants can deal with these issues
For example
, f the factory builds separate housing for its workers, there will be no shortage in the city.
In addition
, if a variety of opportunities are created for businessmen today,
that is
 , if multi-storey houses or homes are built for them to live and it will benefit not only the family of the town but
also
 the reputation of the town. To sum up, not only the politics is responsible for the shortage of houses in the community but
also
 factories are somewhat responsible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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