Nowadays, some people believe that fashion is very important for youngsters and it has negative impact on the people and society. Do you agree or disagree with statement?
It is often argued that young generation will concentrate more on their outlook, their studies will be hampered and they will score low grades in their respective universities.
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, in this
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, everyone wants to look beautiful and trendy but
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majority
of the subjects were in favour of branded clothes rather than cultural costumes and more than half of individuals were youngsters.Correct article usage
the majority
Thus
, young
generation should be more encouraged Correct article usage
the young
towards
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in
academic
or sports, so that they can have a bright future ahead.
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academics
Secondly
, it will definitely lead to more
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the more
a more
negative
impact on the children . Children are very vulnerable and they get well easily motivated. They always admire their older brother and sister as role models.Correct article usage
a negative
Therefore
, this
kind of negative influence will leave a very bad impression on their mindset and consequently
, they will also
try to persuade their older siblings. Pertaing
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nowadays, in many high schools and universities in Korea students are not allowed to wear fashionable clothes or use trendy bags in colleges. It is mandatory for everyone to wear college uniforms so that their
is no disparity between individuals.Replace the word
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Hence
, parents and elders should teach pupils the value of money and how they can become inspiration
for their siblings.
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fashion
is very crucial for young
generation and I firmly Add an article
the young
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believe
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that it has Correct your spelling
believe
negative
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a negative
infuence
on people and society. So Correct your spelling
influence
its
the duty of the parents, teachers and elders to teach and motivate youngsters Correct your spelling
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fashion
, rather they should concentrate more on their academics, sports and hobbies for better
future.Correct article usage
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