You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear sir, I am writing

this

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letter to

imform

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inform

you

regarding

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about

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a musical performance. You

are

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come

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came

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tocame

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my city

last

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Friday

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Amritsar

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its

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very good performance by you l really love

you

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your

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voice and dancing style

also

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. I

was never saw

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that

this

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kind of performance in our life it is

great

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a great

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movement for me.

Moreover

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was really enjoying the

movemont

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movement

and do dance

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to my

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favorite

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favourite

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song tum hi ho it

very

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is very

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good song and all the people

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liked

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and making a video for

this

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song and upload

the

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it the

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instagram

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Instagram

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. Other think that you are open da Facebook live and making a video with people and

see

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seeing

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that

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am in the video

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am very happy.

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, l will request you

for

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help

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helping

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musical

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with musical

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activities because you are

legendary

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a legendary

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singer in the country you will give me some suggestions

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about

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music. I am looking forward to

heared

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hearing

hear

you soon Thank you, Your sincerely' Dharambir

birbhangu7878

May 12, 2022

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

159 words

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In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the responsibility of the government to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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