You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear sir, I am writing
this
letter to
imform
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inform

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you
regarding
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about

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a musical performance. You
are
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come

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came
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my city
last
Friday
in
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Amritsar
it
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its

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very good performance by you l really love
you
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voice and dancing style
also
. I
was never saw
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that
this
kind of performance in our life it is
great
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movement for me.
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,
i
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was really enjoying the
movemont
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movement

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and do dance
my
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favorite
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song tum hi ho it
very
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good song and all the people
like
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and making a video for
this
song and upload
the
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instagram
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. Other think that you are open da Facebook live and making a video with people and
see
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seeing

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that
i
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I

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am in the video
i
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am very happy.
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, l will request you
for
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help
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me
musical
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with musical

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activities because you are
legendary
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singer in the country you will give me some suggestions
by
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music. I am looking forward to
heared
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hearing
hear

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you soon Thank you, Your sincerely' Dharambir
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