You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to
applying
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apply

The to-infinitive that follows the verb writing requires the base form. Change applying to the base form.

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for the job you have been posting in the Australian magazine.Let me
introduies
Correct your spelling
introduce
introduces

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myself to you
first
! My name is Amy and I am 25
Years
Fix capitalization
years

Years does not appear to be a proper noun. Consider lowercasing it.

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old, I am now working as a
part time
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part-time

It appears that part time is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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Chinese teacher in
a
Change the article
an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word education.

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education
center
Change the spelling
centre

The spelling of center is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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in
HongKong
Correct your spelling
Hong Kong

The word HongKong doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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and have more than 7 years of teaching
expirence
Correct your spelling
experience

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.
However
, I am looking for a chance for working
hoilday
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holiday

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. The students I teach
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are

It seems that the verb is does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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around 5 to 10 years old, so looking up for 2
six year old
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six-year-old

It appears that six year old is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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child would be easy for me.
In addition
, I love to stay with the kids and spend time with them since staying with children makes me feel simple and happy. I would
also
love to explore more of your culture and share mine with you as well! I can
also
teach your student of Chinese words and food if you want to! Best, Amy.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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