You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter to

applying

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for the job you have been posting in the Australian magazine.Let me

introduies

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introduce

introduces

myself to you

first

! My name is Amy and I am 25

Years

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old, I am now working as a

part time

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part-time

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Chinese teacher in

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education

center

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centre

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HongKong

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Hong Kong

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and have more than 7 years of teaching

expirence

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experience

However

, I am looking for a chance for working

hoilday

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holiday

. The students I teach

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are

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around 5 to 10 years old, so looking up for 2

six year old

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six-year-old

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child would be easy for me.

In addition

, I love to stay with the kids and spend time with them since staying with children makes me feel simple and happy. I would

also

love to explore more of your culture and share mine with you as well! I can

also

teach your student of Chinese words and food if you want to! Best, Amy.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

152 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Greeting

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