Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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2Word repetition
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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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