Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Fully explain your ideas

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

As a result of electronic invention such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent so you agree or disagree?

The advance in air travel are focused only in first-class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You are employed full-time and also doing a part-time evening course. You are not able to continue the course. Write a letter to the course lecturer. In the letter • explain why you cannot continue the course • describe the situation • say what you will be doing about it

Youth unemployment is increasing in many countries in the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures can be taken to solve it?

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