You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the job of looking after your

six year old

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child during a six-month stay

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Australia. I believe I would be highly suitable for

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job, and it would be a win-win situation for us. I have been longing to visit Australia and it would be great for me to live with your family

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year since I am having a gap year. Aside from being able to view the mesmerizing sceneries and have the delicious crocodile soup, I would be much obliged

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I given the opportunity to look after your child as well. I would surely enjoy the precious opportunity to travel around various places

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Australia with him. I have

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experience in

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area and can

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assure you that I will do a great job. I hope that your family is doing excellent these days.

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, I look forward to receiving your prompt reply and I would be glad to meet you soon! Thank you! Yours faithfully, Matt Ng

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

172 words

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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing.What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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