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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the job of looking after your
six year old
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 child during a six-month stay
at
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 Australia. I believe I would be highly suitable for
this
 job, and it would be a win-win situation for us. I have been longing to visit Australia and it would be great for me to live with your family
this
 year since I am having a gap year. Aside from being able to view the mesmerizing sceneries and have the delicious crocodile soup, I would be much obliged
were
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 I given the opportunity to look after your child as well. I would surely enjoy the precious opportunity to travel around various places
of
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 Australia with him. I have
much
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experience in
this
 area and can
also
 assure you that I will do a great job. I hope that your family is doing excellent these days.
Besides
, I look forward to receiving your prompt reply and I would be glad to meet you soon! Thank you! Yours faithfully, Matt Ng
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