The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Online Shopping is the newest trend in
this
10 years, and I do agree Correct determiner usage
these
this
trend will lead to all the shops in town.In the morden
city, almost all the group age, even Correct your spelling
modern
elderly
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the elderly
also
know how to do the
online shopping, it crossover every Correct article usage
apply
types
of goods , we can nearly get all the things we need from online shopping.
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type
First
, I think the delivery service now a days
is almost a complete industry, International Express Correct the word
nowadays
company
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companies
such
as DHL and UPS, can even complete an order in the day.In addition
, using clothing retail as an example, when the customers need the cloth for an ergent
use, they can ship it in the morning and their consumer can Correct your spelling
urgent
resive
it in a few hours later, which help to save a lot of time.
Correct your spelling
receive
Second
, online shopping is not just selling daily grocery
now, but fresh Fix the agreement mistake
groceries
food
and take away
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takeaway
food
.FoodPanda is one of
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apply
the
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apply
example
, Change to a plural noun
examples
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the consumer
a consumer
consumer
can order the Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
food
they like, and there are up to hundred tyes
of choice.Correct your spelling
types
However
, the key of
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to
it
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its
success
is they can Add an article
a success
delivery
the Replace the word
deliver
food
within an hour, it perfectly
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is perfectly
fit
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fits
for
the young couples and busy workers.
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apply
Last
but not least, to rent
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renting
a shops
is the highest spending for the shop founders, when their business can turn into Correct the article-noun agreement
shops
a shop
the
virtual way, Correct article usage
a
the
spend the rent in Correct your spelling
they
other
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another
way
, Fix the agreement mistake
ways
as
advertising and branding.Correct quantifier usage
such as
Also
, an
online shops do not need must staff to Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
handle
, when they can save the spending,the price of goods may Correct pronoun usage
ithandle
also
can
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apply
be decrease
, to benefit their consumers.
Online shopping makes buying goods become more convenience, it can Change the verb form
be decreased
also
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slive
slove
the large spending for the founder , which can benefit the consumers and the express and delivery industry.Correct your spelling
solve
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