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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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Online Shopping is the newest trend in
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this
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 10 years, and I do agree
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 trend will lead to all the shops in town.In the
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modern
 city, almost all the group age, even
elderly
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the elderly
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also
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 know how to do
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apply
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online shopping, it crossover every
types
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 of goods , we can nearly get all the things we need from online shopping.
First
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, I think the delivery service
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nowadays
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 is almost a complete industry, International Express
company
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companies
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such
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 as DHL and UPS, can even complete an order in the day.
In addition
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, using clothing retail as an example, when the customers need the cloth for an
ergent
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urgent
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resive
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receive
 it in a few hours later, which help to save a lot of time.
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, online shopping is not just selling daily
grocery
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groceries
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 now, but fresh
food
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 and
take away
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takeaway
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food
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.FoodPanda is one
of
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the
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apply
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example
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,
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the consumer
a consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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 can order the
food
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 they like, and there are up to hundred
tyes
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types
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 of choice.
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, the key
of
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it
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its
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success
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a success
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 is they can
delivery
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deliver
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 the
food
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 within an hour, it
perfectly
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is perfectly
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fit
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fits
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for
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the young couples and busy workers.
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 but not least,
to rent
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renting
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a shops
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shops
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 is the highest spending for the shop founders, when their business can turn into
the
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a
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 virtual way,
the
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they
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 spend the rent in
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another
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way
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ways
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,
as
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such as
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 advertising and branding.
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,
an
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apply
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online shops do not need must staff to
handle
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ithandle
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, when they can save the spending,the price of goods may
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can
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be decrease
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be decreased
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, to benefit their consumers. Online shopping makes buying goods become more convenience, it can
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slive
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slove
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solve
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 the large spending for the founder , which can benefit the consumers and the express and delivery industry.
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  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
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