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WOMEN'S EMPOWERMENT WILL LEAD IN SOCIAL DEVELPMENT, WHAT ARE YOUR VIEWS?

#women #empowerment #develpment
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Empowerment
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 means power in the hands of
women
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. It signifies that
women
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 should be given equal opportunity in every field. In
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Empowerment
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, we will discuss the need for
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empowerment
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 and the ways through which it can be achieved. History says that
women
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 were ill-treated
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 as rape, acid attack, dowry system, honour killing, domestic violence, etc., are still happening in India. Out of the total population, 50%
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the population should consist of
women
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. The literacy rate in girls is very low. Most of the girls are not even provided with primary
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.
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, they are married early and made to raise children and shoulder only household work. They are not allowed to go out. Even
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 the workplace,
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 are discriminated against. They are paid less for the same work as compared to their male counterparts. So, the roles were mainly based on gender. There was no involvement of
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 in decision making.
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Empowerment
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 is the process that creates power in
women
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 to live a happy and respectable life in a society.
Women
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 are empowered when they are able to access opportunities in a variety of fields
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 as
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education
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, profession, lifestyle, etc., without any limitations and restrictions. It includes raising their status through
education
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, awareness, literacy and training. It
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 includes the authority to
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make
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 decisions. When a woman makes a crucial decision, she feels empowered.
Women
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’s
empowerment
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 is the most crucial point for the overall development of a country. Suppose, in a family, there is one earning person, while in another family, both
men
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 and
women
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 are earning,
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 who will have a better lifestyle. The answer is simple, the family where both
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 and
women
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 are earning money.
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, the country where
men
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 and
women
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 work together develops at a faster rate. in conclusion,
Women
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 can be empowered in various ways. It can be done through government schemes as well as on an individual basis. At the individual level, we should start respecting
women
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 and start giving them opportunities equal to
men
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. We should promote and encourage them to take up jobs, higher
education
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, business activities, etc. we as individuals can
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 empower
women
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 by abolishing social evils like the dowry system,
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 marriage. These small steps will change the situation of
women
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 in society and make them feel empowered.
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