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Some people claim there are different ways of saving energy (electricity and gas), such as using energy for shorter period of time n the workplace and not using electricity, gas one day a week. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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Someone deems that there are various methods to reduce the use of
energy
.
For instance
, shorten electricity using time or do not use
energy
 for a day per week.
To
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 my way of thinking, I
am not agree
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 with
this
 statement. Undeniably, the above methods can save
energy
, but I am afraid that there are some practical problems when executing the measures.
First
 of all, the usage of electricity in
workplace
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the workplace
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 is depending on the environment. If your office is located in a high-rise building, it is hard to imagine
that
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people
 working in a dark place without air-conditioners. Most buildings use a central air-conditioning system to control temperature and humidity,
besides
, daylight is hard to get in mansions as well.
Thus
, As far as I am concerned, reducing time on using
energy
 is not practical in
urban
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an urban
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area
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, even
it
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if it
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 is just a short period
in
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of
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 a day.
Moreover
,
people
 get used to using
energy
everyday
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, it is difficult to change someone's habit. Nowadays, working with a computer, watching television in leisure time, and cooking dinner every night are daily activities for everyone. All of these need
elevtricity
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electricity
 or gas,
energy
 consumption is
happened
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happening
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 around us. It is impossible that
people
do
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 nothing for a whole day. It is no doubt to say that a city will fall
in
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into
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 a nightmare if it
stop
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the
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its
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functions
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functioning
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. In light of the aforementioned,
although
 the ideas of saving
engry
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energy
angry
 are attractive, I still believed that it is not easy to cut
energy
 usage due to environmental problems and the habit of
people
 consuming
energy
.
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