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In the future all cars,buses and tracks will be driverless.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantage?

In the next generations, we may travel anywhere without drivers. Some people claim that these innovations can comfort our life
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 others argue that there are some drawbacks, like accidents, which can occur. From my point of view, I agree with the latter
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that driverless
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 may bring some problems to our societies. In the following paragraphs, Both views of these statements will be outlined in detail. On the
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 of our societies in many issues.
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 of the significant innovations is driverless
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, which are cars without drivers. They are developed by engineers and scientists who would like to support our populations in many issues during commuting to companies or tourist destinations;
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, when you feel uncomfortable or drunk after you visit your friend's party, you can ride these cars to drop off at your house.
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, in the morning, some investors who still feel sleepy after they discussed with their shareholders
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 night,
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 they do not need to drive by themselves.
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, It can save several times during travelling to their companies.
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, many seniors consider these
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, they might believe that these buses cannot analyse accurately all events on the streets. like traffic congestions, so passengers may feel disappointed when the travel time tends to be longer than their expectation.
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, our cities still have some troubles of insufficient jobs. If our towns use these
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, we will see a number of workers who cannot find
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vacant positions to hire.
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, we might see many individuals suffer from unemployment. In conclusion,
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 driverless
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 of the solutions which may save
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 time during the day, the disadvantages, which are inadequate jobs and uncontrol consequences on the avenues, should
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