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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an argument today in a number of
countries
. Some
people
 think it is necessary to spend
large
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 amount of
money
 on
new
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a new
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 faster
railway
, but some
people
 believe the
money
 should be spent on improving existing public transport. Both
view
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views
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 will be disgusted in
this
 opinion piece.
To begin
 with, there are
number
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a number
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of
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or
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of
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countries
 that does not have very fast
railway
 to travel between cities. Whether these
countries
 are underdeveloped or
people
choses
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chooses
chosen
 not to construct. Compare to
countries
 that have a very fast
railway
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railways
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, these
countries
 have the
abilities
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ability
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 to distribute
resource
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resources
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 more efficiently.
People
 can go
to
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there
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their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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 that are far away
with
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 a short amount of time,
therefor
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therefore
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 some
country
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countries
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choses
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chooses
chosen
 to construct
these
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this railway
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railway
.
On the other hand
, when you spent the
money
 on upgrading the public transportation. You will instantly improve the
live
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that
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of that
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 use
the
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apply
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public transportation on the daily basis. They do not have to spend time learning the mechanic of the new
railway
, and that time can
be spend
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 on more reasonable stuff. Some
people
 do not like going through the learning process and
choses
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chooses
 what they often use, for
this
reason
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 they
choses
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chose
chooses
choose
 to
spent
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 the
money
 on improving
the
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apply
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public transportation. In conclusion, it can
goes
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 both ways because there are
people
 who agree and disagree on where the
money
 should be spent. It
depend
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 on what the majority of the
people
 want and if the country can afford it or not. If it is reasonable enough and
majority
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the majority
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agree
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agrees
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 on it, it will be the clear choice for that country.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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