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the
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all stages for generating
cement
and concrete. Overall, the whole process starts
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pulverizing, mixing and heating materials which generate
cement
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cement
puts into
concrete
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mixer
with other materials to manufacture concrete.
Firstly
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to heat the
mixer
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bagged . Afterwards, according to
planned
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proportion of material, workers pour solid materials including 15%
cement
of all, 25% sand and 50% gravel into the concrete
mixer
. In the
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is joined
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the machine. After mixing constantly, the production of concrete is finished.
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