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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today, we are still arguing whether our environmental
problem
 is from losing a particular species of plant and animal or there are other important environmental problems. I will be discussing
these
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both views and why
people
 think that way along with my opinion. Losing a large number of plants and animals disturb the food
piramid
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pyramid
 and the
ecosystem
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 overall oxygen production rate. Some
people
 may think
this
 is the main
problem
 of
the
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global warming because
the
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statistic
show
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 that when the plant decrease in that area,
overtime
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 that area get warmer. Killing those animals that are on top of the food
piramid
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pyramid
 can
also
 lead to
over population
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overpopulation
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 of small animals that feed
of
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 plants,
there for
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make
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 plants harder to grow.
On the other hand
, There
are
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 pollution that
play
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 a role
on
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the
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global warming. The release of co2 in the air can block the heat from escaping the
earth
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 atmosphere which
lead
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 to global warming.
People
 in the city mostly think that
this
 is the most important environmental
problem
 because they may encounter pollution
everyday
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.
People
 who never go out in the wilderness never know what the wilderness is facing, In conclusion, it
depend
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 on where
you
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life
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live
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 and the what environmental
problem
occure
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occurs
occur
 in that place. I believed that when global warming
happen
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 it comes from a lot of
factor
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. Nothing is the most important and nothing is the least. We should care about the ecosystem we are living in and make the world a better place to live in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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