Many cities replace farmlands and parks with houses. Is it positive or negative?

It is often argued that more
cities
should be built on farmlands and
parks
while others argued that agricultural
land
and green belt should not be covered under new plans.
Although
building new
cities
to cope with the growing population is
necessity
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these days, green belts and farming
areas
should not be undertaken for
this
. In
this
essay, what are the negatives of planning towns on fertile
land
, will be discussed.
To begin
with, new urban
areas
are required to accommodate the growing population and every nation tries to provide housing to all its citizens. Planning new townships on fertile
land
not only limit the cultivation output but
also
put pressure on fertile
land
. Nations will unable to feed the rising population.
For example
, a study by
the
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Queen's University found that
the
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developing countries
such
as Bangladesh have imported thirty
percent
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more food grain than their total production.
Furthermore
, the rising demand for housing and the falling number of
parks
in the
cities
may pose health issues to people living in the
cities
.
Therefore
, to incorporate more people, high rise buildings may be constructed
instead
of covering open lands.
Further
,
land
in the towns is mostly covered
such
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as
cemented
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, which hinders the
sippage
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of
water
to soil and leads to lower the groundwater
level
in
cities
and farms. Reduced
water
level
poses threat not only to farms but
also
to people living in high rise buildings. For
an
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instant, a survey by the Metrological Department of India has found
in
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that the
water
level
of Delhi has fallen by one hundred
meter
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in a span of only two years. Providing facilities to citizens by covering agricultural
land
may take societies to starvation or totally dependent on other countries for food requirements.
Hence
, the government should avoid constructing buildings in farming
areas
and open
areas
like
parks
should be left to compensate
decreasing
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water
level
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. In conclusion,
this
essay supports the idea that urbanisation of the farmlands and
parks
ought to be avoided and covering
parks
is a negative trend.
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