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You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear, Sir/Madam I am writing
this
 letter gently in order to lighten you, the information which you have published in your previous prescription about kish
island
 in Iran is totally incorrect. Kish
island
 is not the biggest
island
 in Iran whereas, you have published it as the oldest.in lightening the fact Gheshm
island
 is the biggest one whit more than two million kilometres wide.
Furthermore
, it is vital for an international magazine like you to search adequately around the title which wants to provide worldwide. I ] argue to you that it is essential to inform the correct information and make an apology in your
next
 month's magazine to lighten people and travel agencies who have a great level of attention to you when they are searching for destinations.
Finally
, all the affirmations certainly would play an important role in retaining your reputation. so, it would be better to take an action as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Masi.Dehbashi
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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