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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Characteristic
features
 differentiate for each person.
However
, nowadays,
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 have been continuing about which ways affect people's traits,
such
 as environmental experiences or inborn
features
. I am in
favor
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 that
environment
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 has more impact than inborn ones.
Firstly
, human-being is a social life form.
In other words
, individuals are to improve
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their self
theirself
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 up to
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physical
physicial
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 world that they live in.
For example
, If persons living in
asian
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 and
europe
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Europe
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 zones are compared to each other, it will emerge rather
distincitive
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distinctive
 differents. While
european
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 people are open-minded more,
asian
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Asian
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 ones become more conservative. Another example to be given is that far-east humans are much more competitive compared to
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. On the other side, in spite of all explanations, it is a fact that some critical
features
 remain
in
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 without any changes, despite
social
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 environment. Emotions can be demonstrated as
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. According to the studies conducted by Toronto University, traits
belonged
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 to mother and father are transferred to children up to a degree before borning. Especially, art skills
such
 as music or painting are conveyed to babies
from
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 parents. Backing to the history, Mozart, Beethoven and many more carried traits of
own
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their own
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 parents. To recapitulate,
i
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 opine that environmental forces play
role
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a role
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 more in our lives. Even
people
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 gain beneficial
features
, it is not possible to
be
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builded
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 them without
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an environmental
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environmental
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. From another perspective,
social
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 arena is an impulsive power which it converts potential skills
to
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active
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the active
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 form. Naturally, all geographical regions reflect various
features
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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