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Internet access helps young people and workers achieve their education and work goals more easily than before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the
Internet
 becomes an irresistible thing in our daily life. There is an opinion stating that
Internet
 access helps young
people
 and workers achieve their education and work goals more easily than before and I strongly agree with
this
 opinion.
Firstly
, with the
internet
, many
people
 are getting closer to more studying chances.
Instead
 of spending time at the library researching exhaustedly from
this
 book to another book, we can easily access various resources over the world with just one browser. Just one click and we can get what we want with no energy at all.
Besides
, during the COVID-19 quarantine, the
Internet
 helps many
people
 continue their studies at home. No matter where we are, we just sit down in front of
internet
 accessing devices and still connect with friends and professors to absorb the knowledge.
Secondly
, the
internet
 becomes a tool for many
people
 to reach their work goals. Before the
internet
 era, many activities only occurred face-to-face. In commerce, there were a lot of difficulties in getting
people
 to know about your products. Regarding employment, finding a job was a hard challenge for everyone. Thanks to the
internet
, many companies can connect to whom they target, and workers stay close to many chances that those companies offer. In conclusion,
although
 the
internet
 still has a dark side, we can't deny the fact that the
internet
 brings us a wide range of opportunities in everything.
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