Some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers who make a greater contribution to society should be paid more than sports athletes and entertainment stars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people

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believe that professional workers

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as doctors and

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have paid more than

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athletes

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tv stars. I believe that there should be reasonable

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among the professions depending

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to right to feed their families. The professions

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have a great contribution to

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may cost too much.

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system can not be fair enough for some of us. Having a skilled teacher or additional courses

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. If we believe that they deserve more, we would

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the balance between poor and rich. We all keep

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who had been supported

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and who hadn't had. Every

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by sad

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who hadn't had enough money to live

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happily

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who believe the opposite.

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here would be differences between salaries. if we consider that being entertained or watching a good match are

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very important. These

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health

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altogether

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would be enjoyable and

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moments in our life which boost our sanity. In

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, who has great

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contribution

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as a profession would be anyone

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enternatiners

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entertainers

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. Whatever we do for a living, we all deserve to be well paid equally.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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contribution to society
public health
extensive education
significant debt
high levels of stress
responsibility
future generation
undervalued
long-term importance
market demand
entertainment industry
societal value
compensation system
income inequality
essential services
adequately staffed
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Some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers who make a greater contribution to society should be paid more than sports athletes and entertainment stars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many researchers believe that we can now study the behaviour of children to see if they will grow up to be criminals, while others disagree. To what extent do you think crime is determined by genetics? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

Since it is so easy to reach a large audience on the Internet, people have to be exceptionally talented to become famous these days. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many research found that some food and drink products containing bad substance for human, therefore it must be banned from the market. To what extent do you agree or disagree?