Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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point in educating us and it is one of the significant
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.
Nevertheless
, others like myself are
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the opinion that
this
modern era with all of its
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advancements
advancement
needs more up-to-date
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subjects
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such
as technology and
science
which make us able to develop constantly.
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in
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paragraphs. on the one hand,
history
is a dominant teacher for modern humans.
History
generously
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us how to
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not repeat the same mistakes.
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knowing about the
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decision
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been taken in the past helps modern people to move forward with a fast peace if we would give enough credit to
history
. Past
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lessons
seasons
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better
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toward future.
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incrediable
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incredible
benefit
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learning
history
in education
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is,
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and
well developed
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options and
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to resume.
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, individuals may follow the footsteps of
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ancients
. Take politicals
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instance, they tend to learn from the older
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politicians
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their
ideas.
on the other hand
, subjects like
science
help us to discover new information about different
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of things
such
as the methods of staying healthy by eating healthy foods.
This
knowledge given to us by scientist help us
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illness.
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, in the
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many died because of less information about
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diseases
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plague
, but today
science
helped us to
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avoid
such
illnesses.
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, technological
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advancements
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guide
us to
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easier
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life style
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. Speed and
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comfortability
compatibility
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to us by endorsing the tech. Devices like smartphones or
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laptops
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helps
helped
us to have
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fast communication and
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way
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.
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learning
this
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in schools have more
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positive
factors for students and in my
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they should be thought and
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give
lived
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given
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credit more than
other subject
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another subject
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like
history
. All in all, considering two different opinions about learning
history
or subjects like technology I am still
convince
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that learning technology or
science
studies could benefit us more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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