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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes to recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some of us believe that if governments don`t legislate on recycling,
this
 is not working for civil.
Although
 I believe that,
this
 might not happen just the law. So how is work that kind of issue? Probably
the
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both side shoulders responsibilities.
First
 of all, in recent years re-produce is increased. Re-produce (that`s what I called) is producing things using materials.
Also
 as we can see that
second
-hand consumption is preferred by most of them. A lot of campaigns come into existence
such
 as bringing the bottle
then
 taking the money , collecting the plastic lid , winning the
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wheelchair
 etc. For me,
this
 kind of stuff is encouraged for
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 safe world.
However
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 a lot of countries couldn`t reach 100% ,
besides
 Swiss, Germany, and Norway has a really highest level of
recycled
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. The point of
this
 , I think , they have a system which is be obligated by authority. ,
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 I couldn`t say that individuals doing
this
 because governments pushing them. The reason for
this
 is they have consconsciousness of the environment. The only reason human beings do
this
 is because of that. If they understood
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anything not important
then
 care for the Earth ,
this
 is the time everything going to be all right.
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 sum up , I agree,
the
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 governments have to do something but
this
 is not the only constitution , they might be emphasis to people with action.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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