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in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finshing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disavantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Nowadays, it has become very common for young people to take a break before joining a job or after graduation. The main benefit of
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 trend is not only travelling around the world but
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 gaining some knowledge and
experience
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 of something but there is a drawback it may affect their future. When the
students
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plan
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 to go to work or travel after schooling, they apply for work or college admission. They can quickly get those opportunities because they already have
experience
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 or gain some knowledge.
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, a few foreign universities encourage their
students
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 to go to
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 kind of activity or select their
students
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 based on
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experience
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 is an additional benefit for
students
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. It can help them
plan
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 their future education or get some business plans. Even though the significant disadvantage of
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 approach, they can easily distract from their
studies
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.
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,
students
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 quickly get admission, but they hard to concentrate on their
studies
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 because it is difficult to focus on their
studies
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 after a long break. In conclusion, taking a break is good because they can gain knowledge and
experience
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.
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, it should help their
plan
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. Some of the
students
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plan
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 to study after the gap.
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, they put more concentrate on their
studies
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. The more they focus, the more they get a better future.

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