Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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many believe we should not pay much

money

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to protect endangered species. I hugely agree that

animals

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are worth

to be

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paid to be saved, and they should inherit

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the future. All

animals

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, especially those who faced

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apply

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extinction, are like

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a diamond

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diamond

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diamonds

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which are worthy, we must spend

money

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for them, to be preserved. Humans' errors mostly have caused them to be destroyed.

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, they are valuable gifts from god

hence

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, we should try to save them, without consideration

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the amount of

money

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spent.

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, marines' lives are going to be devastated

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chemical substances which are

flowed

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into the oceans.

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, people should pay for compensation and attempt to save these magnificent creatures.

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, all

animals

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are

heritage

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for the

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generation which

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me believe to be valued to apply monetary solutions. Many may think there are various creatures and we should not worry about

animals

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prone

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to extinction, if endangered species died out, other

animals

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would

be vanished

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vanish

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gradually.

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, we should protect even endangered species to continue their lives for

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humans. Nations can learn from them and respect their ancestors as well.

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, they will consider their environment more respectful. In conclusion, I believe,

public

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the public

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should make many efforts to preserve all

kind

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kinds

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animals

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, endangered ones

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, and it does not matter how much

money

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would be cost since all survival creatures are worth to

be cared

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care

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for.

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, we

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are responsible

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responsible

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respond

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the

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generation to see them and be educated.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

endangered species
biodiversity
intrinsic value
existential threat
ecosystem
conservation
economic benefits
funding allocation
competing needs

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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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