The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given map gives information about the development of a science

park

from 2008 to the present day.

Overall

, the

park

has expanded with more buildings and facilities to study and research. At the northwest of the science

park

, there was a grassland in 2008 which was replaced by a research and development building,

while

the business units remained unchanged.

In addition

, the reception

to the offices was given way to

university

Correct article usage

the university

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hub. The car

park

at the centre was reduced in size,

contrast

Add the comma(s)

,contrast

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the cyber security

to it was extended to take over the small grassland. At the

west south

Add a hyphen

west-south

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of the

park

Add a comma

,park

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the woodland is still there

while

the IT centre was

make

Wrong verb form

making

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way for

innovation

Add an article

the innovation

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centre.

Moreover

, a newly built station was added in the railway and bus stop at the esat way to help citizens easily travel to the

park

. The buildings

Change the verb form

were

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was link

Change the verb form

linked

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together with

paths and there

are

Change the verb form

show examples

more cycle path around the

park

to help people

easy

Change the word

easily

show examples

walking

Wrong verb form

walk

show examples

around the

park

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

171 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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