The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map gives information about the development of a science
park
from 2008 to the present day.
Overall
, the
park
has expanded with more buildings and facilities to study and research. At the northwest of the science
park
, there was a grassland in 2008 which was replaced by a research and development building,
while
the business units remained unchanged.
In addition
, the reception
next
to the offices was given way to
university
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the university
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hub. The car
park
at the centre was reduced in size,
in
contrast
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the cyber security
next
to it was extended to take over the small grassland. At the
west south
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west-south
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of the
park
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,park
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the woodland is still there
while
the IT centre was
make
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making
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way for
innovation
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the innovation
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centre.
Moreover
, a newly built station was added in the railway and bus stop at the esat way to help citizens easily travel to the
park
. The buildings
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were
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was link
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linked
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together with
paths and there
are
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is
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more cycle path around the
park
to help people
easy
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easily
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walking
Wrong verb form
walk
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around the
park
.
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