The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map gives information about the development of a science
park
from 2008 to the present day.
Overall
, the park
has expanded with more buildings and facilities to study and research.
At the northwest of the science park
, there was a grassland in 2008 which was replaced by a research and development building, while
the business units remained unchanged. In addition
, the reception next
to the offices was given way to university
hub.
The car Correct article usage
the university
park
at the centre was reduced in size, in
contrast
the cyber security Add the comma(s)
,contrast
next
to it was extended to take over the small grassland. At the west south
of the Add a hyphen
west-south
park
the woodland is still there Add a comma
,park
while
the IT centre was make
way for Wrong verb form
making
innovation
centre. Add an article
the innovation
Moreover
, a newly built station was added in the railway and bus stop at the esat way to help citizens easily travel to the park
. The buildings Change the verb form
were
was link
Change the verb form
linked
together with
paths and there are
more cycle path around the Change the verb form
is
park
to help people easy
Change the word
easily
walking
around the Wrong verb form
walk
park
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