In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. What are the advantages and disadvanta

Industries and businesses are being encouraged to move to regional areas outside the big
cities
by governments in most of the countries, that have some positive points like keeping air pollution and its rubbish away from the
cities
,
besides
it can help the traffics downtown. But there are some
problems
,
for example
, people who work there may lose a long time for their commute and the
second
one is the cost of transportation to the
cities
for factories and companies. We can avoid the
problems
which can be caused by the industries and businesses in the
cities
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moving them out of the area because most of the factories are producing enormous rubbish
such
as their poison gas which
contain
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sulphur, methane and more carbon dioxide, and even their sewage
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can cause harmful
problems
for the urban. If factories go out of the
cities
their sewage will be separated and their poison smoke will not cause any
problems
for people
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. The
second
benefit it causes
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is reducing the traffic at the town since many people who
works
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in companies and industries need to get to their job every day and
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