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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 say that surrounding oneself with
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people
 is better than having friends who have diverse
opinions
.
On the other hand
, we can meet
people
 having
the
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opposite perspective about
this
 issue. I
also
 hold the position that it is good to sometimes discuss
about
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different
opinions
 with others. In the case of only getting along with friends having the same
opinions
like
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 oneself, they could not develop each other. They might be very satisfied with their relationships as they do not need to argue often about various topics in their daily life, but that kind of
relationships
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make
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people
 not be able to broaden their mind and think of matters in a narrow range. I believe that it is not always best for us to avoid arguments, listening to different
opinions
 and trying to understand them
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people
 be able to become more mature than those not having
such
 experiences.
Therefore
, it can not be considered a great relationship to meet only
people
 having the same
opinions
 as oneself.
On the other hand
, on occasion, if
people
 could have opportunities to discuss
about
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each
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different viewpoints, it makes them
to
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be able to think of diverse issues widely and develop their minds.
Also
,
people
 to think flexibly can build various social relationships to offer them some good chances which can affect positively
to
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their lives. To sum up, it could be deemed that having only friends who share the same views about many issues could allow
people
 to feel comfortable, but it
also
 could limit their mental growth. For these reasons, my opinion about
this
 topic is that it is essential to meet many
people
 from all walks of life not to make our
mind
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minds
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 shallow and to be a mature
human
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humans
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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