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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 believe that the best way to deal with a bad
situation
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such
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 as unsatisfactory work or
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
money
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 is to accept it. But some argue that it is better to try to improve the
situation
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 to be better. In my opinion, I strongly agree that it is up to the problem some
situation
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 needs to be fixed as soon as possible while some of them are not a big deal and better let go. On the one hand, not every problem in
people
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's
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life
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lives
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that is
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 needed to fix they can undergo if it is not important.
For instance
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, if an examination point does not meet the target better
people
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 just let it go with the flow and keep it to remind and impel them in the
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 test
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 of repetitively thinking of it as a failer. Sometimes, letting small
problems
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 go is better for
people
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 than taking everything seriously.
On the other hand
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, there are some types of
problems
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 that
people
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 must not let
them
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happen continually
such
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 as
money
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 shortages.
This
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 problem could lead to a huge issue in the future.
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, If
people
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 did not have enough
money
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 it means that they could not buy food and paid their bills
this
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 issue is serious because if they did not find a job to earn more
money
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, they would have to stay hungry in the streets. It is shown that
people
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 should not ignore a crucial
situation
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 that can bring other
problems
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 that impact their
life
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. In conclusion, it would be good for individuals'
life
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 if they can let unimportant issues go to reduce the stress and live their
life
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 happier.
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, some
problems
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 should be taken seriously to prevent future negative impacts.
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  • stoicism
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  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
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  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
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