Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree?

In

this

contemporary era,

spirit

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the spirit

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of adventure has been grown

by

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people

followed by extreme

sports

have become more popular.

However

, some

people

argue that these kinds of

sports

ought to be forbidden by

government

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the government

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. In my opinion, I profoundly disagree that, extreme

sports

are threatening

for

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to

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humans and have to prevent.

First

and foremost, dangerous

sports

are not as challenging as some

people

perceive because safety and tutorial classes

has

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been accompanied by them.

That is

to say, previously

people

have to register

to

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for

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special classes about risky

sports

in order to learn exclusive techniques, skills and

first

-aid related

of

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to

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them.

Likewise

, after passing

exams

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they are

allowing

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to do hazardous

sports

. Meanwhile, some organizations always have

been

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attempted to implement some

strictly

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rules that keep these kinds of

sports

in control whereby minimize

dangers

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the dangers

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of them.

Last

but not least, laying down restrictions on extreme

sports

could cause breach the right of individuals. Every government has to robust infrastructure conditions of their countries and provide innumerable facilities for

people

who

keen

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on risky

sports

as well as encourage them

chase

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their

interest

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enthusiastically.

Conversely

, if extreme

sports

have been hindered by governments, individuals will pursue their

interest

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interests

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illegally which can trigger myriad detrimental consequences

of

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for

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humans'

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humans

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health. In conclusion, imposing

ban

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to

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on

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risky

sports

not only

breach

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the

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apply

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human rights but

also

can cause some serious health

hazard

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hazards

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.

Furthermore

, some special classes related to dangerous

sports

have

held

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been held

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under

supervision

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of some organizations

can

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increase

people

's knowledge about them.